What I needed to fix
one day. two girls went on a walk in the forest. then they saw Green goeey stuff. the two girls wanted to toch it so they did then they relized. they felt Different and then they relized they were aliens ahhhh. they sreacmed why do we look like this.
What I fixed
One Day. Two girls went for a walk in the forest. Then they saw green gooey stuff. The two girls wanted to touch It so they did. Then they realized they were aliens ah. They screamed why do we look like this.
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